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1. It's easier when you don't think.

1. It starts early,
on a cloudy day when you recall
the 'childhood memories' of
two summers ago,
that's when you start your backslide into
growing up.

2. On the bright side
you won't notice this until you're
good and ripe in age,
so maybe it doesn't matter
anyway.

3. That tightness in your chest?
The feeling that you're not ready
to take on the rest of your life; it
never leaves.

4. It stews in the pit of your stomach
makes you doubt, 
but there will be days when you look back
on the mountains you climbed -
the raging rivers you crossed -
and you'll have a sneaking suspicion you were
more prepared than you thought.

5. There's nothing like your own bed.

6. Laundry will never smell right
without mom's sweat and tears.
But you still have to separate lights from darks,
keep the zippers pulled tight
and the buttons unhooked.

7. There is comfort in your parents' presence.

8. Things change
the future gnaws and rips and
tears at all that you know.
There will be times when your heart
and soul are left so ragged
that they can't be
pieced back together. So 
make new ones; 
rebuild.

9. It's easier when you don't think.

10. It's easier when you don't think.

11. You may not realize it,
but you've taken your life for granted.
Can you imagine the molding
in your first home? The exact shape
of the windowsills kissing the curtains or
the shade of the carpet?
Things you saw every day
for years
and years
but never committed to memory.

12. Maybe you missed more
than just the fixtures in your house.

13. You can never have
too many hugs
and you're never too old
to go home -
seeking one out.

14. You're going to lose things.
The keys, an argument with your boyfriend,
the constant reminder that you are beautiful.

15. They can sense it, somehow.
They know when you've crossed
the invisible boundary into adulthood.
And suddenly you aren't that cute,
and your stupid jokes aren't that funny,
and no one feel the need to 
build you up anymore

16. because you're an adult now.

17. It's easier when you don't think.
18. Growing up is like a disease -
acceptance soothes the heartache.
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Critique by SugarCaneChapel Jul 28, 2014, 4:12:52 AM
1. "Backslide into growing up". I always considered growing up having forward momentum, albeit a slow march.

2. I've noticed it, but am not "ripe in age" or even in my peak. Clearly I've become old before my time.

3. That tightness in your chest leaves once you've found a fair footing in life. Or everyone in their 30's would be in constant, mild discomfort.

4. Angsty metaphors and mountains/raging river cliches aside you make a valid point.

5. And there's no place like home too, right?

6. That sweat and tears line is just vile. The rest is just unnecessary.

7. There's no faulting that logic.

8. Things do change, just not as graphically as that.

9. It's certainly fills space.

10. And causes you to repeat yourself.

11. Not sure what that has to do with taking life for granted, but memory is a strange mistress.

12. Family, obviously. Veil your meanings more, get cryptic.

13. Or you're just trying to get your parents to lend you more money.

14. Losing my keys would upset me more.

15. Who are "they"? Also, build your self up, you're a grown up now.

16. That's what I said.

17. I think you could have trimmed a lot of fat by thinking here.

18. Growing up is natural and daunting, acceptance is for those who can't stand alone.

I understand it's a free piece, but I'm not all that smitten with it. There are a few nuggets of wisdom but a fair bit of cliches, general waffle and a spelling errors. I'd take this back to the desk and refine it considerably.
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From a subjective and personal point, I really enjoy this piece. It truly hits home, since I'm at this exact point in my life. I'm always wondering where I'm going, what I'm doing, what's my calling? Is this the right way? Am I making a mistake? And it's true. Those questions and uncertainties, like you addressed in the poem, never seem to go away.

From a more objective point, I like the way you wrote it as a numbered list. It brings out the 'growing up' theme more because as we get older, it always seems like there are lists to be made and things to be done. Something I'd like to add, though, is that I think you should have made it rhyme. Rhyming would have made it confined, adding even more to the idea of getting older and how we're all forced to stick to the rules of the adulthood we're all heading toward. But this isn't any error I'm picking on with the poem. Just a suggestion :)

Good job on this piece and thanks for sharing!
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littlelines Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2015  Professional Photographer
This poem is gorgeous and heart-wrenching.  Well done.  :hug:
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :heart:
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ON MY GOSH
this is so like where I am right now, it's unreal. 

If if number three is true, my life is gonna be one long pain...

seriously thiugh, this is very very well done and close to heart 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you dear :huggle: It's a tough place to be. I always come back to this poem when I'm going through big transitions and for the most part it holds true - however there is an importance to the line "It's easier when you don't think." Dwelling on change and worry and confusion is something that only perpetuates the problem, but if you can focus on other things and avoid despairing over changes that you don't want or feel you aren't ready for everything does get much easier. "It's easier when you don't think" is not just a warning, but a little piece of hope to hold onto. 
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XxFlameFrost101xX Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed it is <3 
ohh I see that! That's actually pretty insightful 
and very true 
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401Sakura Featured By Owner Edited Aug 13, 2014  Student General Artist
This nearly made me cry. And it takes a lot to do that. I love this piece a lot. 11. is the one I relate to the most :3 We moved when I was 10 and I was so scared I'd forget everything that I went around taking pictures of every room (every room, even the bathrooms). I was so distraught I even took one of the handles off my drawers to take with me XD My dad found it though and gave it back to the new owners a couple weeks later :I
Anyways you did a great job writing this piece ^v^ One more thing I'd include if you were to ever go back and revise it: something along the lines of "You're going to be ok". Not a big deal but I think that's something people forget as they get older (especially in the messy teenage years) Thanks for sharing, I really enjoyed reading this~ 
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"It's easier when you don't think." 

Oh god. I'm screwed. 

(lovely piece.) 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
You'll be okay :D Just don't dwell on the tough stuff too much. Life's gonna change and it's gonna change fast but if you don't focus on the things you loose it makes it easier to be happy with the things you gain.
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BleedingProphecies Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :D

Hmmm....lovely advice, really. c: Thank YOU! 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is written from an adults perspective. Looking back, I wish someone had told me this so I could have been more prepared for the sudden shift from being a kid to being a full-fledged adult. 
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SaveDaArt Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are still very young. Just wait a few years then read this poem again. ;) 
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somebodi-else Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
7. There is comfort in your parents' presence.
This was my realization of growing up. I'd always looked back sure, thinking wow that was a stupid decision. or huh, i miss that house.  One day I reached the point where I'd rather wake up obscenely early to drink coffee with Mom and Dad than sleep in. Thats when all the doubt and 3. That tightness in your chest? The feeling that you're not ready to take on the rest of your life; it never leaves. sunk in. 
All in all, I think that this is lovely in the bittersweet way growing up really is.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
I'm glad you saw it as a good representation.
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like it!
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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EvilScarrlett Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome :)
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ThatGirl-Over-There Featured By Owner Edited Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
  This maaaaaay or may not have torn out a small chunk of my soul. Mostly because it's true, and I'm scared.

The future is something that can make me feel uneasy. Part of me thinks it's because it is in human nature to fear the unknown. The other part of me is assuming I won't be good enough to withstand the harshness of life and society. But maybe that's just me thinking too much.... I tend to do that, sometimes.

 My father tells me to stay in school, learn, take advantage of youth while it's still with me, persevere, and I'll make it through. I sure hope he's right. Life can be beautiful, but it's also cruel, and there's no escaping growing up, so I agree with you: The sooner you accept, the better. And maybe I should stop thinking.... well, for now, at least....

Thank you for writing this, truly a beautiful piece, I'm sure it's awoken the realization in others as well.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :hug:
I'm familiar with all of those feelings, the idea of the adult world that you develop in your mind is so different from the true adult world. I felt so painfully unprepared when I started taking my first steps into adulthood, simply because no one had told me what to expect. But it's not impossible - thousands of people have made the transition before - you'll be just fine :hug:
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ThatGirl-Over-There Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're quite welcome~~

Well, I guess it's a sort of comforting thought, when you put I that way....

~~Thank You~~
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skeIetons Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow, that is amazing. I'm not one to like poetry at all, but I liked this a lot. Nice job. Seriously.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :heart:
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iexzist Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Loooove the "It's easier when you don't think" motif. Would be a good slam poem.
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iexzist Featured By Owner Edited Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes, the list poem and motifs are both very popular in slam poems. You did it well!
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I was going for a bit of a slam poetry vibe as I was writing :D
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ClockworkCross Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student General Artist
I like this because it honestly make a lot of sense (to me anyway...)
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :heart:
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ClockworkCross Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2014  Student General Artist
I never noticed that you put an 18th in the description. That's a damn accurate comparison
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TheAstronomicon Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It is both difficult and noticeable. That being said, as someone who is a child at heart and quite minded as such, this is terrifying advice, but generally 'good'.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :D
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shade-the-cat Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Artist
Well, I guess I'll pack my bags and move to Narnia. 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's not so bad, once you're through the transition. It's just the looming thought of 'I will soon be an adult, I will have responsibilities, people will stop taking care of me, and soon it will be my job to take care of them"
But in actuality, the transition is slow and if you don't think about what's happening, don't dwell on the uneasiness you feel, everything will happen smoothly.
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shade-the-cat Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Artist
I've got a bit to go until I get there, but I do know that I'll have responsibilities~ It scares me, in a way. I'll have to work, pay the bills, cook, clean., etc...
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It is scary, for everyones I think. Uncharted territory always is.
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shade-the-cat Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Artist
Yeah~
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chichichichipndale Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Eh, I'll just move to Peterpanland.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I'm with you on that one ;)
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DestinyWing Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Maturing can be a little harsh...
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's just such a surprise when you realize what's been happening, the loss of innocence that's occurred over the years. Realizing you're not a kid anymore is hard to come to terms with.
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TTSnim Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
Love this.  ^_^ 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :heart:
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trejowauk Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
Being adult is knowing your responsibilities and knowing what's right, wrong, and life. (Also the increasing "demand" of common sense.)
But I feel like being adult is becoming who you want to be, and other.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Definitely, it's just the shift from childhood to adulthood that's difficult to go through.
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openskyline Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I know everything here is not true, as the critique below me points out. And I agree with some of the things that critique says. 

However, this is pretty perfect in my view.
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :love: I know this won't apply to everyone, but from personal experience and the experiences of my friends and family, this was the best generalization I could come up with.
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openskyline Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
And your best is amazing. 
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daybreaksmiles Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much dear :huggle:
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Nevermore-Grayson Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
This is exclaty what the transition into adulthood means, is beautiful.
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